Corrections on Tale of The Shadow

[Robin Powell]

Part 1 of Phantom Sales <https://archiveofourown.org/series/4457434> --
Phantom Sails?

" a phantom ship known for being unable to tame" -- unable to be tamed?

"tame the one all sailors appear to" -- "appeared", also maybe "the one
ship"?

"following strict ass all fucking" -- "as" lol

"combining his anger issues, need for thrill" -- his need for a thrill

"Were a match made it heaven that meant" -- "Were a match made in heaven,
and that meant"

"At the time, Phil had found that strange. Had thought that his mother and
father never kept secrets from each other. Were a match made it heaven that
meant they were truthful towards each other and in love. Never hurt each
other and always loved one another." -- I see what you're going for here,
but I'd put a pronoun at the beginning of each sentence in that paragraph
except the first, personally.

"despite the rot of it's would " -- wood

keep that godsdamned promise of it was the last thing -- if

to see Kristin there, waiting for Phil -- waiting for him

where his wife was peaking adorably -- peeking

scrunched up in a child, gremlin-like smile -- child-like or childish

even more in love with her, if even possible. -- if that was even possible

need to eat." Kristin said -- need to eat", Kristin said,


with a whiny, (and obviously guilty), "nooooo". -- either commas or parens
to separate out the second clause, not both

his plate back, pating the boy's hair -- patting
-------------- next part --------------
An HTML attachment was scrubbed...
URL: <http://mail.digitalkingdom.org/pipermail/house/attachments/20241101/7ec7dc33/attachment-0001.htm>